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Progress Update – Let The Edit Begin!!

On Monday I started editing Rise of the Sparrows. It went something like this:

editing Day1

LET’S DO THIS!!! -> cut everything! (the entire first chapter is gone) -> hmmm, maybe something is salvageable? ->screw it, rewrite everything -> oh God, why πŸ™

When I was done with it the first page looked something like this:

editing Day3

Oddly enough, I’m not that sad about cutting the lot. I thought it’d be difficult to cut whole chapters but I’m actually looking forward to rewriting it. It was bad and it should feel bad.

Since I started Rise of the Sparrows a couple of years ago the writing was pretty different in the beginning compared to the final few chapters. There’s a lot more cutting going on after the first chapter (and the entire prologue) but the difference in quality when you go from ‘chapters from a few years ago’ to ‘chapters from May this year’ is huge. It still needs work, but it’s nowhere near as awful as the example above! So there’s hope, right? I even came across a (relatively small) section which gave me goosebumps! GOOSEBUMPS! That’s got to be a good sign, right? Right??

I’m also surprised that I’m not cutting as many adverbs or verys as I had expected. I was prepared to cut an adverb and a very in every other sentence, but I’m not coming across that many. The ones I do cut are pretty painful, though. (ex: ‘Quickly, she rushed across the square’ – as opposed to what, exactly? Rushing slowly? Eugh.)

Early on in the week some difficult questions popped up. Is it too late to change my main character’s name? Is it a problem that her ‘sidekick’s’ name is made up, and thereforeΒ has no meaning? Why does my highlighter sparkle?

editing Day4
This is what happens when you draw over a unicorn, children!

I’m not that bothered about Cephy’s name being made up, but Rachael means innocent lamb. Innocent. Lamb. It doesn’t suit her personality, therefore it bugs me. I talked to a friend about it earlier this week and she pointed out that maybe it does fit, since Rachael herself doesn’t really fit into Blackrock. Her name fits her as well as she fits into her home town, and indeed the entire continent. So, her name fits because it doesn’t fit! (did that make sense?) I was looking for names meaning Survivor or Fighter, but that’s surprisingly difficult. In the end, the only names I found (which I also like) are Evin (young fighter), Elda (battle) and Isana (strong willed). Evin is kinda growing on me but I’ve gotten so used to calling her Rachael that it feels wrong to change it. I’d really appreciate your input on this one πŸ™‚

editing Day2
Yes, that’s part of the draft she’s sitting on. I’d like to pretend that she’s trying to protect it, but I think we all know that my cat is being a cat here and tries to be as inconsiderate as possible.

So this is how my first week of editing has gone. I’ll fit a little more today before I go to work, and I’d like to have the first set of changes applied by the end of January.

I’m currently aiming for May 2016, but we’ll see πŸ˜‰ If you’re interested in being a beta reader, watch out for a post around March! (I hope – it’s hard to estimate since I’ve never done this before)

Now, if you’ll excuse me, I’ve got more editing to do!

Have a good weekend,


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  1. It’s quite liberating to cut bits, and just as exciting in add in new. Good luck with the editing, and I hope your cat lets you continue hahaha πŸ˜‰

    • It really is, it feels good to get rid of parts I know wouldn’t work and replace them with something better. Thank you – she’s just been fed so she should be sleeping off her food coma for the next few hours πŸ˜‰

  2. Editing is really tough and takes up so much time. I changed two of my characters names because I felt they didn’t suit them. It was hard at first because I was so used to writing their original names but once I got used to their new names I liked them more. I think if you don’t think Rachael suits her and you want to change it, try using a new name you like. You will get used to it and soon forget about her previous name. I wish you well with the rest of your edits. πŸ™‚ P.S. Pretty cat. At least your cat doesn’t rip up papers My dog has a bad habit of doing so. If I was in school I could truthfully tell the teacher my dog destroyed my homework.

    • Thank you, I was thinking I’ll just start calling her Evin or Isana and see if I warm up to it. It feels like a huge change but I’m glad I’m not the only one ^^
      Thank you! She has a very pretty face :3 Did your teacher believe you when you blamed your dog?

      Thank you for following Cookie Break, I look forward to getting to know you should you post more often πŸ™‚

      • Thank you. πŸ™‚
        It’s nice to connect with other writers. I like both of those names. And no, my dog never ripped up my homework. I meant if he did, it would be the truth. Sorry if my post confused you.

        • Oh no worries! I know what pets can be like so it’s not impossible ^^ Although the worst my cat does is sit on it. Unless it’s an envelope. She loves playing with envelopes and shows no mercy.
          Thank you – I think I’m starting to lean towards Evin πŸ™‚
          I agree, I love connecting with other writers and potential readers. Blogging is fun but it’s even better once you’ve found some like-minded people! (who maybe even get your obsession with stationery)

  3. I feel your pain. I am in final edits also. For me it’s hard to cut wisecracks and the bits that I find funny. But is it doesn’t propel the story along.. it’s got to go!

    Hang in there, it’s the final stretch!

    • I’m not quite on the final stretch just yet (it’s only the first edit right now) but it’s getting there πŸ™‚ Good luck with your final stretch! Being ruthless is the only way to do it so keep cutting where it’s necessary.

  4. Cephy seems more like the innocent lamb if you ask me, but you know your characters better than anybody. Sometimes that’s why making the names up works better- there isn’t that automatic assumption that you know what they’re like because of what their name means. I liked Evin and Isanda, but do you really want to fit the profile to the name, or the name to the profile? Personally Rachael sounds nice and innocent… so doesn’t quite fit perhaps keep the R & make something similar sounding so you won’t miss it?

    • Cephy is definitely more innocent than Rachael (I wanted a name for her that means ‘naive’, but couldn’t find anything), but I don’t think I’ll rename her now. Cephy’s name being made up doesn’t bother me, and it just means that it can mean anything πŸ™‚
      I do want the name to match the personality, not the other way around. Their personalities have to come first – I had some characters which weren’t named at all when I was writing the draft because I didn’t know them well enough yet πŸ™‚
      How about Revin, as a mixture of Rachael and Evin? πŸ˜› The innocent girl who can strike if necessary!

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